Village Books Poetry Group: P.I.P.

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Village Books Poetry Group is a fine place to bring in a PIP = poem in progress. Last Thursday I shared this new poem “PEW” with my group. One line in the poem started an interesting conversation. The line is “Mid service she wiggles like bacon in a hot pan”. Some thought it didn’t fit, others said it was “an incredible turning point”.

Being apart of a writing group helps you to think outside the work. Your writing friends can give you a new perspective on work you maybe too deep into to notice. I find it a most helpful tool. Whether you write, non-fiction, fantasy, novels or poems, I encourage you to seek out a writing group. If there isn’t one in your area, start one.

Here is my poem in it’s original form:

PEW

She sits still at first

Coat on, legs crossed, hair in place

I do not know her name

her smile properly friendly

as she shares the peace

Peace be with you-

-and also with you

Mid service she wiggles like bacon in a hot pan

Her focus moves about the sanctuary; forward, then down at her lap,

the back of the pew, left toward a noisy toddler, then at the ring on her finger.

The ring receives the most attention

the corner of my eye catches repetitive moment

her hand out atop her knee, twirling the ring

round

her thumb and forefinger

again

Finally, her thoughts become action

Arm reaches for the spine

of a hymnal laying on it’s back

gone sideways from first service

with a quick flip she corrects

it upright, front forward

Her fingers now at rest,

she turns to smile

This was something easy to fix

If you live in the Bellingham area, or would like more informaiton about how to start a writing group in your area, contact me: splawssji@yahoo.com

http://groups.yahoo.com/group/VBpoetrygroup/
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Published by Shannon Laws

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